Then there is the effect of isolation from Covid-19, back in 2020 when most the book was written. Buried so deep in our own minds, with little input from the outside world, each character also became quagmired in their thoughts. Large portions of the text come off as introspective ramblings, with little to no description or dialogue to break up these internal monologues.
So, Ashley and I are taking a new approach to our editing: We each will edit and rewrite our own chapters, before continuing with our usual process of handing the manuscript back and forth. This will give us a chance to fix our mistakes, and revamp the original manuscript. After a long battle of trying to figure out what is wrong, adding comments and making suggestions, I’m excited to get started!